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the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.

the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.
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The given bar chart
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 represents the data collected about
coffee
 and
tea
 consumption in
Sydney
,
Melbourne
, Brisbane,
Adelaide
 and
Hobart
 in Australia in
past
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the past
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 4 weeks.
Overall
, most of the Australian
citizens
 in these 5 cities went to a
cafe
 for buying or drinking
coffee
 or
tea
while
, buying fresh
coffe
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coffee
 had the lowest percentage among
the
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Australians. During
last
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the last
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 4 weeks in the given country, most
of
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people
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the people
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 bought their
coffe
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coffee
 or
tea
 from a
cafe
,
for example
,
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the citizenz
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citizenz
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citizens
 of
Melbourne
,
Hobart
 and
Sydney
 consumed over 60% of their
coffee
 or
tea
 from a
cafe
. Followed by Brisbane’s
citizens
, 55% of
people
 in the city bought their needed
coffee
 or
tea
 from a
cafe
 and in
Adelaide
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,Adelaide
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 the percentage of
people
 buying their drinks from
cafe
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a cafe
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 was a little bit lower than instant
coffee
 consumption by 50%. The second rank in the chart belongs to
consumption
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the consumption
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 of instant
coffee
 in
Hobart
, Brisbane,
Adelaide
,
Melbourne
 and
Sydney
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respectively recording about 55%, 53%, 50%, 48% and 45%.
Finally
, in the
last
 spot,
less
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fewer
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citizens
 bought fresh
coffee
 or
tea
.
Citizens
 of
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
 bought over 40% of their needed
coffee
 or
tea
 fresh
while
 less than 40% of
people
 in
Hobart
,
Adelaide
 and Brisbane bought fresh
coffee
 or
tea
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, sydney, melbourne, adelaide, hobart, citizens, cafe, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • preference
  • beverage
  • caffeine
  • demographics
  • trend
  • survey
  • cultural significance
  • habit
  • seasonal variation
  • health consciousness
  • availability
  • implications
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • data interpretation
  • quantitative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • peak times
  • economical impact
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