You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, • introduce yourself • say why are you interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc. Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Manager, I am writing to you to let you know my interest in joining your sports centre. My name is Raj Kumar. I have just moved into the New Town community, about a month ago. I am enjoying

this

place, thanks to the chill weather and friendly neighbours. I used to be a member of a club in my hometown, which I visited almost daily. Being part of the club has helped me stay in shape,

also

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apply

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meet with people and socialise. Asking my neighbours about any good clubs around, most of them recommended

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apply

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your place

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too.

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Do you mind providing me with some more information about the club? What are the facilities your place provides?

Also

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Also,

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I would like to know about different membership types and their charges. I am

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interested to know if there are any additional benefits if I choose to subscribe for a long-term package say one year or even more. I

wish

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hope

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to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Raj Kumar

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

168 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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