The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2000 to 2007
The bar chart reveals the data of
teenagers
, who spent time
doing several activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
Overall
, it could be observed that teenagers
spent a lot of time
watching television
, while
they spent a short time
bowling from 2000 to 2007. Moreover
, the spent time
going to pubs, watching television
and shopping gradually increased in the given period, while
doing homework and doing sport decreased from 2000 to 2007
According to
the chart, the time
spent on the activities of watching DVDs, and bowling, which was done by teenagers
, was not stable in a given period. Furthermore
, the time
spent on bowling activities from 2002 to 2007 did not reach 5 hours
, while
watching television
reached the peak hour. In addition
, watching television
approximately reached 38 hours
by 2007.
On the other hand
, teenagers
started spending below 10 hours
going to pubs and shopping in 2002. However
, late in ,2004 both exceed 10 hours
.Submitted by n.piriyan997 on
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