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some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money . other argue that it is better to try and imrove such situations . disciss both the view and give your own opinion.

#people #belive #situation #job #shortage #money #imrove #situations #disciss
Out the life every person they pass through the different
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 of life . some individuals believe that we should do some action to
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 out
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 phase.
On the other hand
 , some believe that just accept the current situation. both these views are justified
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 and I will give my opinion. The foremost view is that people must fight the bad situation until they reach out from
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 phase. Always, Every
problem
 has a solution and there is no
chance
 to come from the bad condition if they do nothing to solve them .
for instance
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 a financial
problem
 so that they can
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adapt
 new skill and after
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 they have
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 to increase in
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 of income .
on the other hand
 , at certain points in life Accepting a bad situation is a more right instance of trying to improve.
while
 financial
problem
 time , they have a
chance
 to do some non-skill
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and try to fix a
problem
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 learn a new skill , it takes time
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problem
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 may be increased.
To conclude
 , both the point are
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 point .
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 believe
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 option is that people need to try to figure out rather than accept . Through
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improvement always have a
chance
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problems problem
 at a certain level.
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