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Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical services should not be run by profit-making companies. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages?

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Everybody knows that health
services
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 be private by day , so medical
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 can earn too much money. So, many companies like work in medical
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. İ
t
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 has some advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, many company work in medical
services
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 they open farms,
hospitals
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, and medical equipment companies. Of course, both
government
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 and private. some private company has good
services
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 for medical servicesservis, but some departments and quality don'
t
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 have them in
government
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 that's why private servicesservis are so important to find all
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.
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, Sanko Hospital is located in Gaziantep, and it is a private hospital. Many petitions can find good
services
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 in that hospital, but many departments don'
t
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 have them in
government
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hospitals
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. For
this
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 ,reason Gaziantep public to choose go to a private hospital. They can get good
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 there. Privete servis devalop for medical servis.
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, many countries don'
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 have private
hospitals
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 in Korea, they don'
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 need private medical
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 because their governmentgaverment gives good
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 in
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hospitals
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.
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, Korea is the best one in the world for medical
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 serves special in computer and radiotherapy. The example shows us, it is not an important private or
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.
To sum up
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, İf you want good
services
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 you must make a powerful education system because if you have well education, you can do doctors, courses, or engineers about medical
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, and they can develop your medical service
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. İn my opinion, gavermentwork on the health system and should give big money for it
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government
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 should let to forwork private companies because racing gives us good quality so many company work for the be number one, it is possible good
services
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 and it is a benefit for people they can find good quality.

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