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Some believe technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of individuals say that
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technology
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 has made our
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 complicated and the answer to
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 issue is to abandon the
technology
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 and lead a simple
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. I majorly disagree with
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 approach as it would not be a practical solution to
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 issue. Presently, almost every person is handcuffed to
technology
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 in one or another way. A temporary loss of the internet connection,
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, makes these
people
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 helpless which ultimately makes them frustrated and anxious. If these
people
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 learn
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 the usage of gadgets and
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 alternatives (
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 as socialising with
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 or doing a hobby),
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 it will be less troubling for them.
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, it is not the
technology
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 that makes our
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 complex, it is the overuse of it.
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, restricting
the
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usage can help
people
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 in many ways. Another point I would like to add is that it would be nearly impossible to completely abandon
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 in today's world as willingly or unwillingly, the person will have to use
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 in order to keep up with
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 world.
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, some
people
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 may argue that just like
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 past if
people
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 do not depend on
technology
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,
life
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 will be
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 and easy.
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, I can say that
people
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 have made themselves so habituated
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technology
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 that even if they want to stop using it, they would not be able to.
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, if the person decides to not touch
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 phone in order to live a simpler
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, it will not be practically possible as
mobile
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the mobile
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 phone is needed in almost every daily routine
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. In conclusion, it can be said that it is not
technology
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 that has made our
lives
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 complex, it is
over dependence
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 on
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 that has created
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 mess.
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, abandoning the usage of machines is not going to help us, rather limiting the use will be fruitful. After all
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's purpose is to complement our
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, not to run our
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.
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