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In the past, knowlege was contained in books. Nowadays, knowlege is uploded to the internet. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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books. But up to
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, Because of Technology
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, all the new data has been
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 to the
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. In my opinion, the advantages
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, new and fresh
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, if someone wants to read recent news he or she always
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 to visit
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 or other telegram channels why? Because if someone happens special, after 15 minutes it spreads throws the
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books, until publishers publish
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humans have been comparing the cost between
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. A recent search shows that almost 80% of
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 in the USA, but only 20% of
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 book which cost $10 on one side and if there free choice definitely take
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 option because of free.
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, even though in the past all of the
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in books, days, nowadays, everything is available
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 option has a lot of advantages for
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