IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability and others think that hardwork and practice can make you successful . What is your opinion?

#people #sportsperson #ability #hardwork #practice
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There is a long-held conviction which states that innate ability is imperative to get the fruit of success. Whilst others argue that dedication and training are the key factors. I firmly believe that in order to achieve feats in sports fields, both requirements are needed, even though the latter is superior. On the one hand, inborn prowess will offer various advantages to its owner. They are going to initiate faster and more straightforwardly than the vast majority of people.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, they have the power to perform better and more effectively, more optimally than their opponents thanks to their congenital talents
as well as
Linking Words
 physical health. Despite that, possessing special faculty still has a number of flaws.
For instance
Linking Words
, after they reach a certain level of feats and achievements, they have the propensity to immerse themselves in the fruit they earned and refrain from endeavouring to aim for higher positions.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, a steady, arduous and cumbersome journey requires relentless efforts, an abundance of time,... to get there.
Consequently
Linking Words
, those who accomplish that path as standard and normal human beings will acquire innumerable valuable experiences, skills,
as well as
Linking Words
 expertise.
In addition
Linking Words
, they will train their mental health, their well-being to the toughest, and sharpen their ability to perfection. Even though, it is undeniable that with a similar amount of devotion and dedication, a genius is always going to surpass and precede an average individual.
However
Linking Words
, attaining success in sports is varying from person to person, each sportsman will have their own definition of fruit and sets of goals.
Therefore
Linking Words
, hard work and repetitive practice are two imperative contributions to your prestige. In conclusion, every athlete has a unique perspective in terms of prestige. Innumerable goals but all of them require true passion and a strong will to devote everything to achieve them.
Submitted by nguyennhatanh280707 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural ability
  • hard work
  • innate physical attributes
  • instinctual aptitudes
  • refining skills
  • improving technique
  • consistent practice
  • supportive environment
  • coaching
  • access to facilities
  • nurturing community
  • dedication
  • resilience
  • relentless pursuit
  • excellence
  • unwavering commitment
  • continuous improvement
  • mental toughness
What to do next:
Look at other essays: