The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The two pie charts give information about the percentages of
energy
consumption
in an average Australian household and the
proportion
of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
released by each
energy
consumption
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
heating and
water
heating have the biggest
share
among Australian household
energy
use,
while
the
consumption
of cooling stands
last
.
Moreover
, the largest
proportion
of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
allocates to
water
heating, followed by other appliances. The first pie chart shows that the
share
of heating is the biggest
consumption
of Australian household
energy
usage with almost half of all
share
.
Water
heating ranks second with 30%, and other appliances have a considerable
figure
among
energy
usage (15%).
Furthermore
, the
figure
for lighting and cooling together is almost the same as that for refrigeration by a narrow margin of 7%. The biggest
proportion
of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
accounts for
water
heating with about one-third of all
share
. Other appliances have a substantial
figure
in
greenhouse
gas
emissions
with 28%. There is little difference between the
figure
for heating and refrigeration, the
figure
for the former is 15%.
Although
cooling ranks
last
with 3%, the
share
of lighting in
greenhouse
gas
emission is considerable with approximately one-tenth of all
proportion
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, proportion, greenhouse, gas, emissions, water, share, figure with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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