The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The two pie charts give information about the percentages of
energy
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consumption
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in an average Australian household and the
proportion
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of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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released by each
energy
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consumption
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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heating and
water
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heating have the biggest
share
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among Australian household
energy
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use,
while
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the
consumption
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of cooling stands
last
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.
Moreover
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, the largest
proportion
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of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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allocates to
water
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heating, followed by other appliances. The first pie chart shows that the
share
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of heating is the biggest
consumption
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of Australian household
energy
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usage with almost half of all
share
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.
Water
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heating ranks second with 30%, and other appliances have a considerable
figure
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among
energy
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usage (15%).
Furthermore
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, the
figure
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for lighting and cooling together is almost the same as that for refrigeration by a narrow margin of 7%. The biggest
proportion
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of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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accounts for
water
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heating with about one-third of all
share
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. Other appliances have a substantial
figure
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in
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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with 28%. There is little difference between the
figure
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for heating and refrigeration, the
figure
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for the former is 15%.
Although
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cooling ranks
last
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with 3%, the
share
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of lighting in
greenhouse
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gas
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emission is considerable with approximately one-tenth of all
proportion
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, proportion, greenhouse, gas, emissions, water, share, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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