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The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#poverty #countries #six #years #education #numbers
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Giving
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to get free education and getting essential
skills
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 are very beneficial for Individuals, especially in terms of reducing
poverty
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 among
population
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the population
a population
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 of any country.
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, I think that it is not enough and
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government
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the government
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 should
also
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 propose more working places for
people
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. On the one hand, getting free
knowledge
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 of how to read, write and calculate can boost someone's potential and
person
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a person
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 can find a
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work place
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workplace
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 and start
earn
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earning
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 a living. These
skills
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 are considered as a basis and
people
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 getting them
while
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 studying in school, so everyone
shoul
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should
 know them.
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, if everyone is acquainted with
this
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knowledge
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 it is hard to find a
job
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.
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Job
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The job
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 market is very competitive nowadays and
usually
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,usually
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 the
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work place
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workplace
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 is given to a person who
have
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has
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 had an experience in the industry or who have had
a
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apply
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strong and very accurate
knowledge
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 which is required for a
job
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. But what can
person
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a person
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 with only essential
skills
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can
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do in
this
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 situation? The expansion of
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job
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the job
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 market comes into a field. If
government
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 gives more opportunities
for
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to
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people
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 with only basic
skills
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, it is much easier to reduce
poverty
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 in a country.
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,
developing
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by developing
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 and concentrating on
specific
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a specific
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 area or a region with
lack
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a lack
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 of
work
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 opportunities,
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the
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government
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 can increase
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work force
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workforce
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 of
population
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the population
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.
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, there will be
the
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a
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 fall
of
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in
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people
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the people
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 who live under the line of
poverty
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. Giving places to
work
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 that require less
knowledge
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 and no experience can boost
economy
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the economy
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 of a region and everyone will have a beneficial impact.
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, giving a free education that requires no fees can have a great influence on
people
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,
however
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government
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the government
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 should
also
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 increase places for getting a
job
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 to decrease
a
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the
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 level of
poverty
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • functional literacy
  • numeracy skills
  • educational opportunity
  • employment prospects
  • critical thinking
  • empowerment
  • inequality reduction
  • sustainable development
  • innovation
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