Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Ither people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education is a vital aspect of
society
. The
subjects
that we teach to our youth in the schools, determine the courses of action we take in the future as a collective. There has always been a recurring debate that has divided the public into two groups; one group states that in today’s world,
subjects
like
Science
and
Technology
are more important than
subjects
like
history
or
humanities
in general,
whereas
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the opposing group,
people
favor
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history
and other
subjects
of
humanities
over
Science
and
Technology
and believe that the school system should focus more on these
subjects
. In
this
text, I am going to discuss both of these points of
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and state why I think it is better to hold both of these
subjects
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high importance.
People
who prefer to put more
Science
and
Technology
courses in school curricula have a lot of reasons for their belief, but they
also
highlighted one reason as their major one;
Science
and
Technology
are the
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of
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society
and able
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students to help
people
improve their way of living and to move faster towards the futuristic ideals in terms of technological advancements.
For instance
, a period of time where the focus was put on mostly on
Science
and
Technology
was the beginning of the 20th century, which not only resulted in
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increase in the number of inventions
,
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but
also
encouraged
people
to be more creative and move towards a better future in a faster pace. On the other side of the debate,
people
hold
this
belief that teaching
humanities
and
history
should be the main objective in students’ classes in today’s
society
. The main ground, on which they base their opinion, is the belief that the main thing that lacks in humanity, is
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humanity itself.
In other words
,
people
are too focused on the materialistic and technological aspects of life and
society
, to the point that advancements in these areas are considered inevitable; but
people
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roots and bases of their philosophy which shaped their whole identity as an individual.
Hence
, it is vital for schools to emphasize
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subjects
like
history
and philosophy (or other
humanities
subjects
for that matter) in order to restore the absent insight in the minds of students. Personally, I believe that it goes beyond just black and white, and
people
should avoid taking sides in
this
particular matter. Both of these
subjects
can go hand in hand in schools;
Science
and
technology
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the students’ minds, and
history
and
humanities
shape the students’ identity as an individual, and together, they help students shape a better life for all of us as a
society
. In conclusion, the rivalry between
Science
and
humanities
is everything but productive.
Instead
,
people
should focus on resolving the concurrent issues in the world by having an interdisciplinary approach to life.
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