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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Computers
, in today’s time, play a vital role in most people’s life. It can be seen nowadays, where before most adults used to use
computers
,
children
 use the
computer
 at a very early
age
, and they spend long hours behind it. Using
computers
 at an early
age
 makes
children
 engage with technology faster and helps them to gain knowledge very easily. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing both pros and cons associated with the above notation in my upcoming paragraphs. Getting the opportunity to use
computers
 makes
children
 gain a lot of
skills
 at an early
age
.
Computers
 help
children
 to find out their search for knowledge instantly. It allows them to enhance
skills
 like presentation
skills
, typing
skills
, communication
skills
, and many more.
Computers
also
 help
children
 to learn programming languages which can allow them to have a bright career in the future. A boy of 16 years old in
United
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 States, came to the headline of BBC news that he built a game knowing Java programming language. The game went viral and Microsoft company bought the game from him for 1 Million
dollar
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. Research says that the boy learned programming language from the
age
 of 12 with their own
computer
,
hence
 we can understand
computers
 can play a very positive role in
children
's life. Like
computers
 having so many pros, they have some cons as well for
children
. Sitting in front of a
computer
 for a long time can cause back span and strain issues and can distract
children
’s minds easily. Games addiction is one of the big distractions for
children
therefore
 if it can be monitored by parents,
then
 can have an outcome as the solution for it. In conclusion,
computers
 do have some disadvantages for
children
 but the advantages of them are supplemental. To have a better future for
children
’s
computers
 do play a vital role for them
therefore
 it is worth getting used to the technology by using the
computer
. It can make
children
 grab knowledge and
skills
 faster which will allow them to have a better future.
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