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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates how much
banana
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 coast in four countries (Japan,France,Germany and
USA
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the USA
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) over 1 decade period from 1994 to 2004.
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, what stands out from the graph is that Japan and France's
banana
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 coast witnessed some fluctuations
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and an
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an
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a
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 significant increase
at the end
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 of the period,
while
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 Germany's and USA
banana
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's prices were approximately stable throughout the period. regarding
banana
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's price per kilogram in Japan, It started at 2.00
dollars
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 per kilogram in 1994, After that It rose sharply to around 2.9
dollars
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 in 1995.
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this
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, the figure fell slightly to 1.9 in 1997.
Then
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 it decreased rapidly to reach around 1.6 in 2001. and
at the
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end
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 it experienced a considerable growth to 2,50
dollars
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at the end
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.
while
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 France saw a stable trend of
banana
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 prices to 1.7
dollars
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 from 1994 to 1997. followed by a sharp decrease in 2000 and 2003 .
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 it showed a slight increase to approximately 1.55
dollars
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 in 2004 .
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, both countries GERMANY and USA were relatively approached in
banana
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 price. in 1994
banana
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 cost was 0.99 and 1.4 in both countries respectively and the fee experienced some fluctuations in both states from 1995 to 2003. followed by stable cost to 1.1 and 1.3 from 2003 to 2004 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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