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Some said teachers’ main role is to transmit the information. Nowadays students are exposed to many kinds of information, so the role of the teacher will not work in modern education. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Teachers
 play a very significant
role
 in
education
. Some people consider that
teachers
 are not important in
the
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modern
education
, and their primary
role
 is the
imformation
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information
tranmiters
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transmitters
. I disagree with that point, and my opinion will be discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
teachers
 are not just
a
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imformation
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information
passer
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passers
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, they are the
idea
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 passer. They can help us to build
a intact moral values
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an intact moral value
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 at the same time And
imformation
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information
 is just a single part of
education
.
For example
, when
students
 fail on exams,
teachers
 will tell them the scores are not the most important. What we should do is learn something from our failure, it is not a big deal.
In addition
, targeted
education
 could be given
from
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teachers
.
Students
 can explore new things, but sometimes, it is difficult for them to discover their own problems. Every
students
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have
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 their own
probelms
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problems
, and
teacher
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the teacher
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 can be the
guider
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guide
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.
Teachers
 always can be
a
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good
friend
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friends
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 in school, they have more experience than our peers,
many
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and many
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of
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time
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times
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, they will not reject your
consult
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. Only
transmiting
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transmitting
 the
imformation
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information
 cannot achieve
this
 goal.
Finally
,
teachers
 can point out
students
’ mistakes, and they can be the
students
’
supervisor
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supervisors
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. When
students
 have
a
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 ideal leader, they will find their own orientation, and they will be more powerful than before. It can greatly help them to get more and more close to their goals.
Although
teachers
’ function of
transmiting
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transmitting information
imformation
 may be replaced by technology (
such
 as the Internet,
artificial
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and artificial
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 intelligence) today, they still play a crucial
role
 in
education
. Not only
students
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 need to develop their habit of
search
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 for
imformation
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information
 by themselves, but
also
 they still need someone to help them build a whole system of learning, and develop
our
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 practical ability from all angles.
Such
 as creative thinking skills. In conclusion,
teachers
 still play a vital
role
 in modern
education
, and
i
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 fully
convince
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 that they will be never replaced by anything.
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