The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The line graph shows the

proportion

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of changes in

household

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households

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with electrical appliances

such

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as washing

machine

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machines

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,

refrigerator

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refrigerators

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and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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as well as

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the number of

hours

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spent doing housework in one country from 1920 to 2019. As a general trend, the rate of households with electrical appliance trend shows upwards ,

while

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the number of

hours

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of housework per

week

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each

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in each

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household gradually declined. As the graph reveals , the sector of

refrigerator

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refrigerators

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is the most significantly increased. It showed the percentage of 0% in 1920 which is the lowest

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compared to other sectors. In 1940, it

was rapidly rise

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rapidly rose

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to the

proportion

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of 55% and

then

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continuing

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to rise

at

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to

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90% in 1960.

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Finally

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it reached

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100% in 1980 and maintained

the

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that

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percentage until 2019.

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, the washing machine was at 40% in 1920 which was the highest

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in the beginning

then

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increased by 20% in 1940 and steadily increased and

then

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fell slightly and increased to finish at 75% in 2019 which was the lowest

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at the end

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. The amount of time spent each household spend doing housework per

week

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was 50

hours

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in 1920 and decreased by 20

hours

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in 1940. It steadily declined to 20

hours

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per

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in 1960 and

then

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slightly dropped until 2010

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when

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it was 10

hours

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per

week

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.