The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The given bar graph illustrates the result of a survey in order to show the consumption of two popular
drinks
and the average going to cafes in five cities of Australia:
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
, and
Hobart
in
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a duration of 4 weeks. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is obvious that people in these five cities of Australia frequently went to a cafe to order
drinks
.
While
the vast majority of spending area is coffee in all cities, in
Sydney
and
Melbourne
more people tend to drink
tea
.
However
, the usage of
tea
is quite less in
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
, and
Hobart
. Expenditure on
drinks
approximately
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ranged from
range from
a low of 49% in
Adelaide
to a higher level of 63% samely in
Melbourne
and
Hobart
, with
Sydney
(61%) and
Brisbane
(56%) in between, in
this
4 weeks period. In terms of comparison of consuming these 2
drinks
in the given length, the residents of
Brisbane
had used 2 times more coffee (53%) than
tea
(34%). Nearly the same happened in
Hobart
and
Adelaide
with 23% and 21% in margin.
Moreover
, the population of
Melbourne
had chosen coffee 54%, almost 5% superior rather than
tea
,
while
Sydney
citizens' percentages demonstrate an approximate equality, with just a
percent
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in
difference
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the difference
a difference
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between these two common
drinks
.
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