the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits
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The bar chart illustrates the data on the outcome of consuming and drinking
coffee
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and tea in 5 cities in Australia, namely
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane, Adelaide and
Hobart
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.
Overall
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,
according to
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results, in the
last
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4 weeks, the majority of Australian citizens preferred going to a café for
coffee
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or tea, particularly in
Melbourne
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and
Hobart
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. Meanwhile, the number of people who bought fresh
coffee
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was less than those who bought instant
coffee
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. Just over 60% of locals in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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and
Hobart
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went to a café for a cup of
coffee
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or tea in the
last
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4 weeks, compared to around half of Adelaide citizens. Instant
coffee
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was mostly bought in Brisbane and
Hobart
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, accounting for more than half of residents,
while
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less than 50% of citizens from
Sydney
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and
Melbourne
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did.
On the other hand
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, the least favourite habit in every city is buying fresh
coffee
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.
Sydney
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experienced the largest portion which was around 44%, nearly 42% in
Melbourne
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and less than 35% in Brisban.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, melbourne, hobart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • frequency
  • preference
  • health benefits
  • caffeine content
  • cultural significance
  • consumption
  • trends
  • venues
  • social aspects
  • beverage
  • shift
  • influence
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • discussion
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