Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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These days most

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have a job and they must find somebody to take care of their children. They have two choices which are childcare centres and

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childcare

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view, most

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believe that the childcare

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the best services for children of

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age . There are many reasons

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view. The first reason is the place of the

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. It provides cameras and you can know what is the system of it and how to deal with them.

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, it is nearest to their work than their

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. The second reason is the

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. It is very useful for their age and they know how to deal with them.

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, other working

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think that

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members will be more better

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for their kids. One of the main

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more comfortable if kids

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your family. Your

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know how to deal with them . What is more , the kids feel more comfortable with them

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any time.

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will save money more than putting them in

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

214 words

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early childhood education
stimulating activities
cognitive and social development
peer interaction
social skills
fostering independence
personalized and emotionally supportive environment
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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Fully explain your ideas

today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?