Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion

These days most
parents
have a job and they must find somebody to take care of their children. They have two choices which are childcare centres and
grandparents
. In
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childcare
or
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grandparents
and what
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my opinion in
this
argument. Let's start with
first
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view, most
parents
believe that the childcare
centre
provide
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the best services for children of
pre-school
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preschool
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age . There are many reasons
of
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this
view. The first reason is the place of the
centre
. It provides cameras and you can know what is the system of it and how to deal with them.
Also
, it is nearest to their work than their
grandparents
. The second reason is the
activites
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activities
activity
of the
centre
. It is very useful for their age and they know how to deal with them.
On the other hand
, other working
parents
think that
fmaily
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family
members will be more better
cares
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for their kids. One of the main
reason
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is
feel
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more comfortable if kids
with
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your family. Your
grandparents
know how to deal with them . What is more , the kids feel more comfortable with them
in
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any time.
Moreover
, the
parents
will save money more than putting them in
centre
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured educational environment
  • early childhood education
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  • cognitive and social development
  • peer interaction
  • social skills
  • fostering independence
  • personalized and emotionally supportive environment
  • sense of security
  • emotional well-being
  • wealth of life experience
  • cultural values and traditions
  • enriching upbringing
  • familiar environment
  • structured activities
  • social interaction
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