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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
 that overweight than ever before. They tend to consume many foods that contain high calories and feel reluctant to exercise. In
this
 essay, I will examine the factors that contribute towards overweight and explain the main effects of
this
 epidemic.
To begin
 with, there are several causes of
this
 epidemic. The main reason is the sugary drinks and foods. In
this
 modern age, society can easily find food and drinks with high sugar content. It makes
people
 that consume it gain more calories in their bodies.
Moreover
,
people
also
 feel reluctant to exercise. Society become busier than ever. They become more competitive in their work lives.
However
, their busy lives make them not have time to take a gym or do exercises. They usually feel tired after work and take a rest.
As a result
,
people
 become getting fat easily. Meanwhile, being overweight can be harmful to society. Being overweight can make
citizens
 sick. The citizen that consumes high sugar every day can make them easily be attacked by disease
such
 as diabetes. It will make their scar hard to heal.
This
 open scar can
also
 be contaminated by batteries which can occur gastritis.
Moreover
,
citizens
 that have diabetes get easily tired of doing their work. For illustration, workers can not submit the job on time because they feel so sleepy every time.
Consequently
,
people
 can not put their best in jobs.
To sum up
, it is becoming increasingly common for
citizens
 to consume sugary food and drink and feel hard to take exercise.
This
 trend makes
citizens
 overweight.
However
,
this
 epidemic can be harmful to
citizens
such
 as getting diabetes which leads to hindering their ability in doing their daily activities.
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