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Success is often measured by wealth and material possessions. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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It is irrefutable that having a lot of
money
 is related to being successful but there is other ways to indicate victory in
life
 .in
this
 essay I will delve into some of the reasons of how to become successful and how to know the result of your
success
.
Firstly
 being rich is indeed one of the consequences of achieving goals in
life
, but it is not the only way to measure triumph.
This
 is because being satisfied
in
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 your achievement is much better.
Furthermore
, being happy in
life
 and with your surroundings is
also
 an indication of
success
.
For instance
, if a rich person
have
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 all the
money
 in the world but
feel
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feels
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 miserable and sad, his
money
 won't make him feel better.
On the other
hand
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 there are several steps and an instruction to follow if you want to become successful,
firstly
, a person must
has
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self discipline
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 which
give
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 the ability to work even if the surrounding circumstances is not favourable.
Secondly
, consistency is the key to
achieve
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 dreams. Because dreams without consistency are just
fantasy
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.
For instance
, my best friend is a CEO of a big company. has a daily routine
which
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that
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 he follows every day, for the past fourteen years of his
life
 without being bored. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that
money
 comes with
success
, but it is not the only method to judge
the
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success
 in
person's
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a person's
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life
, a variety of
few
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measures must be followed to achieve triumph.
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Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affluence
  • Materialism
  • Fulfillment
  • Well-being
  • Philanthropy
  • Societal norms
  • Personal growth
  • Economic power
  • Subjective
  • Humanitarian
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