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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We know that every year, one of the world organizations will publish a report about the
country
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's Gross domestic product and a category of economic
wealth
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 levels.
According to
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 several scholars, they believe that when a
country
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 is already wealthy, every extra
increase
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 in economic riches does not make its residents any more satisfied because there are a lot of different types of
people
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.
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, we
also
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 should consider a
country
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's development, which will be beneficial with additional growth in economic
wealth
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. Regarding those issues, I will discuss them in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, a
country
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 has various types of groups of
people
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 who live there. When a
country
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 makes additional gains regarding economic
wealth
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, it will affect some groups of
people
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.
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, students, single parents, and elder
people
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 will feel these effects when a
country
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 rises in economic
wealth
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. It is because they do not have much money to support their lives when all of their physiological needs,
such
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 as food, clothes, and other costs,
increase
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.
On the other hand
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, any extra
increase
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 in economic riches in a
country
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 will be invested in
country
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 development. It can be advantageous and
also
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 support their citizens in the future and make them more satisfied;
as a result
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, a
country
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 will be growing rapidly.
For example
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, currently, South Korea is increasing their economic
wealth
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 through investments in the technology field,
such
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 as artificial intelligence, to support their
citizens
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 healthier and happier lives by developing new technologies. In conclusion, some experts argue that when a
country
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 is already wealthy, any growth in economic riches does not make its residents happier.
However
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, personally, I believe that any additional
increase
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 in economic
wealth
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 in a
country
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 can be an investment for future generations and will make them more satisfied with their lives.
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