The chart below shows information about ticket sales for performances at the National Theater over a six-month period.

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The chart illustrates data about 5 different performances at the National Theater from January to June.

Overall

, National Theater customers prefer Humorous Situations, Swan Lake and

Rock

Star Live performances sold an almost similar amount of

tickets

whereas

Carmen and Works of Beethoven sold out nearly half of them.

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we can see that the most sold performance was Humorous Situations by National Mime Troupe with 5000

tickets

sold. Swan Lake and

Rock

Star Live which are portrayed by City Ballet and

Rock

Star

Rock

Band respectively sold out a similar amount of

tickets

(4750). On the other hand theatre clients bought Carmens` and Works of Beethoven's

tickets

almost two-fold fewer compared with

above-mentioned

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performances.

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The chart below shows information about ticket sales for performances at the National Theater over a six-month period.

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