Many young people today spend too much time following the latest fashion trends in areas such as clothing and technology. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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There are a lot of young people that spend too much of their time and money to follow the latest fashion trends in areas

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as clothing and technology. It is that kind of people that will buy a new version of a product that a company release for their consumers to buy just because it has a slight improvement from the latest variation. The improvement may not be significant, but the price is far higher than the previous one. When we buy something

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new to us like new shoes,

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phones, there is

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feeling of satisfaction. The excitement

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we watch as our shoes

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packed, when we open the box at home and admire it, all of that doesn't count when you keep buying new things every week. The feeling of pleasure will surely dissipate. There are

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people that will buy

merchandises

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, or follow their

idols

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fashion clothes. As long as they buy it as something precious as a

memoriam

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memorial

; an object that can remind them of their idols, it is a good thing. But when it becomes a habit and all those things that have been bought end up in a trash bin, it'

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only waste their money. The main point is to spend money wisely. It

doesnt

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doesn't

mean you shall restrict yourself from buying anything expensive but it means to buy something good so rarely that you'

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be at the edge of your seat waiting to obtain it and so that you'

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cherish it. And not only that, you may need to buy yourself something nice for yourself when you finish a project, or

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something significant as a reward for your hard work. With that in mind, you'

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have no longer

spending

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to spend

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too much time following the latest fashion trends in areas

such

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as clothing and

tecnology

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technology

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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306 words

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Many young people today spend too much time following the latest fashion trends in areas such as clothing and technology. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

new technology change the way children spend their time . do the advantages and disadvantages.

People these days watch TV, films and other programmes alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together, To what extent dou you agree of disagree wtih this opinion?