Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
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decade, the use of technology in our daily life is increased significantly.
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people are often filmed without
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conscious. In
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essay, I will discuss the benefit and drawbacks of
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situation and explain why I think it has more negative impacts than positive
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on us. There is a main reason for thinking that
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, it is essential that people are informed when there is a camera which is recording the area
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as if something happens you know that there is proof.
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a train and somebody stole your wallet, you can ask for some help
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the train company and, with the police’s support, have a chance to identify the burglar.
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,
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trend is useful for many businesses. First of all, a company can collect a lot of information about our characteristics and behaviours.
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it is an easy way to find new solutions for selling products and services.
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reason, customers should be aware of
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, in order that they can pay attention to it and, maybe, avoid buying something
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not necessary.
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, somebody can use technology to spy
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people, and
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is a big problem because our privacy is
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dangerous. In conclusion, I believe that nowadays we are recorded everywhere and most of all without any
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. Being filmed is a good thing if it is possible to prevent awful situations or find evidence, but not for other
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.
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