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Wealth and material belonging often measure the success that a person has. Do you think wealth is best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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There is no doubt, money and material considered
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success
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 in a
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person
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life
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i
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 will debate why I disagree with
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 assumption and elucidate what is really relevant to demonstrate
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success
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. To commence with , there is not a single method to calculate the
success
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someone
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life
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always consist
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 efforts and personal goal in
some one
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someone
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life
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, an extremely wealthy
person
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 that inherits all his fortune has not done anything to achieve
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 socially privileged position.
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 case,material belonging should not indicate how successful
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person
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 is.
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, wealth would only be a defining factor for those who work hard and managed to successfully increase their earnings .
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, having said that
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this
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show
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 how much dedication and effort someone can put into daily activities
where
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when
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 pursuing their personal goals .
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accurs
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occurs
 because individual achievements are the best method to calculate
success
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.
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, when a student who does not have enough
saving
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 to cover university expenses is awarded a full scholarship. It is obvious
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person
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 achieved a successful accomplishment .
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, pushing
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yourself
youself
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yourself
 to work hard
for
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to
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 fulfil dreams and to make a successful
person
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 In conclusion,
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 wealth and material belonging cannot
measured
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the
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apply
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success
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 in
some one
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someone
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life
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 .
Its
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 only depend on hard work in
life
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 and
than
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then
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achieve
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achieving
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 their goals
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