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Wealth and material belonging often measure the success that a person has. Do you think wealth is best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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There is no doubt, money and material considered
success
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 in a
person
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life
. In
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i
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 will debate why I disagree with
this
 assumption and elucidate what is really relevant to demonstrate
the
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success
. To commence with , there is not a single method to calculate the
success
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someone
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life
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always consist
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 efforts and personal goal in
some one
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someone
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life
 .
For example
, an extremely wealthy
person
 that inherits all his fortune has not done anything to achieve
this
 socially privileged position.
in
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this
 case,material belonging should not indicate how successful
this
person
 is.
Therefore
, wealth would only be a defining factor for those who work hard and managed to successfully increase their earnings .
Furthermore
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this
 topic
show
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 how much dedication and effort someone can put into daily activities
where
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 pursuing their personal goals .
This
accurs
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occurs
 because individual achievements are the best method to calculate
success
.
For instance
, when a student who does not have enough
saving
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 to cover university expenses is awarded a full scholarship. It is obvious
this
person
 achieved a successful accomplishment .
Thus
, pushing
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yourself
youself
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yourself
 to work hard
for
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 fulfil dreams and to make a successful
person
 In conclusion,
it is clear that
 wealth and material belonging cannot
measured
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the
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success
 in
some one
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someone
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life
 .
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 only depend on hard work in
life
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than
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achieve
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 their goals
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