Many children have become habitual about excessively using mobile application day and night. Why do you think this is so ? What parents can do to avoid this situation declining further ?

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most children have habits of using cell phone day and night. nowadays
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occasion is a problem. ı think it is a problem because mobile applications can be dangerous for
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can give their heir control but they should put time and
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should find different activities and recommend sports to their
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.our offspring are important and we should think about our future.
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are examples for offspring so we should not so much use the phone that our child can not use
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