The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned

future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton and its future remodelling plan.
Overall
, the factory located on the south of the
river
will be reconstructed into a housing area with a wide range of infrastructure for daily activities.
In contrast
with , the nowadays map, the farmland area from the north of the
river
will be restricted and the housing segment is planned to construct a bridge to cross the
river
.
Firstly
, we can see that currently from the south of the
river
located only factories and from farmland it separates only the
river
.
Secondly
, from the future plan ,map it is obvious that all factory areas will be remodelled to the housing which
also
will cross the
river
by bridge and locate partially on the north of the
river
, restricting the farmland segment nearly by half. On the south side of the
,
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river
the housing will have
well-developed
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infrastructure with a playground and school located to the east of the town and a medical centre to the southeast of the centre of the housing. There
also
will be shops located southwest of the centre of the housing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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