many television news programmes show pictures of events in the news which people find upsetting. While television has a duty to report important news, it should not bring disturbing images into people’s homes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I completely agree that upsetting

images

must not be broadcasted

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news

channels that are watched by

majority

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at home.

Firstly

, some viewers get afraid and the

news

they have watched might just be

exagurated

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exaggerated

Secondly

, it can mentally disturb the spectators. We need to understand that

the

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news

channels can

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play an important role in controlling the mode of the people watching it and in

todays

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time

such

media is used as a weapon to induce fear amongst people by some governments.

For example

in India, the

BJP led

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central government is

continuousely

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continuously

showing the

after

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affects

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of the attacks that have been made on Muslims by radicalised Hindutwa mobs which are very terrifying to watch,

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started to create fear amongst the Muslim communities across India as the government wants them to live in fear of the Hindus. Some subscribers who watch

news

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and are mentally weak, cannot

handel

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handle

harsh

images

shown by the media.

This

can mentally affect people in several ways by not allowing them to sleep, or develop anxiety. An example from my personal experience is when I had come across a

news

that was showing

images

of a haunted activity in the neighbouring city because of which I was

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mentally shaken in a way that I could not sleep for several days.

Therefore

, I would like

to conclude

by saying that upsetting

images

must not be shown to the public as it can have adverse

affects

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their

day to day

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life.

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many television news programmes show pictures of events in the news which people find upsetting. While television has a duty to report important news, it should not bring disturbing images into people’s homes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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