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many television news programmes show pictures of events in the news which people find upsetting. While television has a duty to report important news, it should not bring disturbing images into people’s homes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I completely agree that upsetting
images
 must not be broadcasted
in
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news
 channels that are watched by
majority
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 at home.
Firstly
, some viewers get afraid and the
news
 they have watched might just be
exagurated
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exaggerated
.
Secondly
, it can mentally disturb the spectators. We need to understand that
the
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news
 channels can
a
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play an important role in controlling the mode of the people watching it and in
todays
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today's
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 time
such
 media is used as a weapon to induce fear amongst people by some governments.
For example
 in India, the
BJP led
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 central government is
continuousely
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continuously
 showing the
after
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affects
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 of the attacks that have been made on Muslims by radicalised Hindutwa mobs which are very terrifying to watch,
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 started to create fear amongst the Muslim communities across India as the government wants them to live in fear of the Hindus. Some subscribers who watch
news
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 and are mentally weak, cannot
handel
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handle
 harsh
images
 shown by the media.
This
 can mentally affect people in several ways by not allowing them to sleep, or develop anxiety. An example from my personal experience is when I had come across a
news
 that was showing
images
 of a haunted activity in the neighbouring city because of which I was
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 mentally shaken in a way that I could not sleep for several days.
Therefore
, I would like
to conclude
 by saying that upsetting
images
 must not be shown to the public as it can have adverse
affects
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in
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 their
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life.
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