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in the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you thinks the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future, all kinds of
vehicles
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 as cars, buses and trucks will be
driverless
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 and most passengers prefer to use these kinds of transportation for their own needs.
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 there are several advantages related to
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, some negative points exist when all the
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 do not have any driver. On the one hand, vehicle
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 has some positive points.
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, the number of accidents caused by humans when they sleep has decreased sharply since there is a system to be careful all the time and prohibit
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 kind of accident.
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, Driving will become an easy task for everyone. The auto-driver can play a teaching role against people and guide them in driving.
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, I believe the negative points of
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 idea outweigh the positive ones. I will try to say some challenging aspects of
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vehicles
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.
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, imagine a situation in which there are not any drivers in the street and all
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 drive by themselves, the fear rises because computer control
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 and very few bugs occur in the guiding system the consequences are very big.
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, experience shows all the computer systems in different fields need some operator to support them and whenever it is necessary take regular action, so in driving we can not put all the driving responsibility to the
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 system and all the time we need a human.
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, the reason for using technology is to help humankind not to manage them, so we should use it not allow it to control us. In conclusion, there are some advantages to using
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vehicles
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 but it is essential for people to control the level of using
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 without drivers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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