The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.
The maps display how the university town has improved from 2010 until now.
Overall
, as can be seen, there are significant changes that have been done to buildings, with a lot of removing, expanding and adding facilities. For instance
, there are more student accommodation facilities nowadays compared to the past.
Firstly
, the student residence building at the northern western corner has been extended by adding a new block beside the old one. However
, the student accommodation that existed in 2010 at the western southern side of the lake has been replaced by a new facility that contains shops and offices for pupils. Furthermore
, another interesting point is that the area that surrounded the lake which was specialized for lawn and seating area has been removed now. Also
, the block for teaching art and science has been reconstructed with modern design and currently is for art only. Finally
, there is a road that has been constructed at the eastern southern corner of the campus.Submitted by batoolajajba on
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