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The given bar chart illustrates the top 10 states electricity which produced and consumed during 2014.

The given bar chart illustrates the top 10 states electricity which produced and consumed during 2014.
The given bar chart illustrates the top 10 states of
electricity
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 produced and consumed during 2014.
Overall
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, what stands out from the bar chart is that China and USA headed the list of
electricity
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 production and consumption.
While
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 France, Germany and Korea bottom of the list.
In addition
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, Russia came
the
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apply
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third on the list among the ten countries. Looking at details regarding the China was the
most
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country of
electricity
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 expenditure and production both were almost similar and accounted for 5.322 and 5.398
KWH
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 in turn.
While
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 the second most country
utilizes
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that utilizes
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 and produces
electricity
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 was
USA
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the USA
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by
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with
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 4.099 and 3.866
KWH
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 respectively.
Then
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 in Russia and
Japan
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,Japan
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 they used and produced
electricity
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 moderately and it represented 1.057 and 1.038
KWH
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 for Russia and 935 and 877
KWH
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 for Japan annually.
Besides
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, Korea was the least country of
electricity
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 generation and expenditure by 485 and 445
KWH
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 yearly.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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