With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people.

Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?
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The table shows the
salaries
of secondary or high school
teachers
in Australia, Denmark,
Luxembourg
, Japan and Korea in 2009. In general, we can see that
Australian
teachers
had the lowest starting and maximum
salaries
,
while
teachers
from
Luxembourg
had the highest starting and maximum
salaries
. In Denmark,
teachers
started their work with a
salary
of 45000. They
then
spent only eight
years
to reach their maximum
salary
of 54000 and levelled off.
Similarly
,
Australian
teachers
got a starting
salary
of 28000 and spent one more year than that of the Danes to reach their maximum
salary
of 48000 which remained unchanged for the next seven
years
.
By contrast
,
teachers
from Japan, Korea and
Luxembourg
took about four times more than that of
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and
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Danes in reaching their maximum
salaries
. Among the three, the Japanese needed to take 37
years
to reach a peak of 86000, which was around twice as much as their starting
salaries
. Similar to Korean
teachers
, who got a doubled
salary
after 34
years
of teaching.
By contrast
,
teachers
from
Luxembourg
got a starting
salary
which is almost three times as much as the
Australian
. They took 30
years
to reach their maximum
salaries
of 132000, which was treble the
salary
of the
Australian
.
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