The table illustrates that how many people who aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three countries.

The table illustrates that how many people who aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three countries.
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The table illustrates
that
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how many people
who
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aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three countries.
Firstly
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, it is noticeable that there was a
slightly
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decline in
Japan
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from 1940 to 1960. It was about 5% fall to near 3%.
Then
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, the tendency was
remain
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to remain
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stable from 1960 to over 1980 in
Japan
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.
Next,
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the
trend
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was
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was increasing
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increase
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between 1990 and over 2000. Followed by the
trend
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, there was a
smoothly
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rise from over 2000 to 2030.
Then
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, from 2030 to 2040,
Japan
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has a
dromatic
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dramatic
increase
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, it was about 10% to 25%.
Finally
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, the tendency become
smoothly
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from 2030 to 2040.
Besides
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,
it is clear that
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Sweden had a smooth
increase
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in 1940 and 1960. It
is give
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information that the proportion of
the
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people
who
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aged 65 and
over65
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over 65
rise from 7%to 8%.
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Furthermore
, there was a
slightly
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increase
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from 8% to 13% between 1960 and 1980.
However
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, from 1980 to 1990, there was a
decline
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declining
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trend
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and the figure falls from 13% to 11%.
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there were two tendencies
increase
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, one was
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2000 to 2010, and another was from 2030 to 2040. But there was a slow decrease between these two trends.
It is clear that
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a
similarty
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similar
similarity
trend
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from 1940 to 1980 in
USA
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the USA
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by the countrySweden. Both of these trends
increase
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.
Nevertheless
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, there was a stable
trend
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in
USA
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the USA
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from 1980 to 2020.
Lastly
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, there was a sharp rise from 2030 to 2040 which is similar to
Japan
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.
Overall
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, the tendency of
Japan
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was more
flactuated
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fluctuated
than other countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that, next, ".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, trend, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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