The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

The aim of having a lone
career
is becoming an
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obsolete
absolute
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fashioned
fashion
one
. The new
fashion
will be
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to
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possess more careers or ways of earning income and
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further
education will
be
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that
continues
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continue
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throug
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through
life.
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ways of getting money through numerous careers and advancing education, proves that having
one
career
is truly becoming an
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ancient
fashion
one
.
Firstly
, things are
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generally
on the increase.
e.g
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e.g.
groceries, transportation, down
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to
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as little as
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water.
This
is a clear indication
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that
having
one
career
Will not suffice. next is
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the limitations
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to making
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an impact
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in your
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environment
. You will be less
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effective
in your
eviromeint
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environment
becouse
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because
of
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sticking
to only
one
career
.
It is clear that
people with
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several
career
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careers
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contribute more
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even
to their society.
For example
, someone that has multiple
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careers
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,
one
in Architecture
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other in Law can be
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relevant
when it comes to building a house and defending a case in
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court
.
Whereas
the person with just
one
can only be relevant in that
one
career
he has and even in making more money for himself. In conclusion, the aim of having
one
career
is old
fashion
one
. The recent will be
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to
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have several
career
or financial
increase
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increases
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and additional education that continues
throug
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through
life. That will bring more relevance and
instead
of being old
fashion
, you will increase more
career
relevance.
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