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The best way to improve your health is to do regular excercise. To what extend do you agree

#health #excercise
The most outstanding manner
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 be better and improve your
health
 is by daily
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exercise
. Resting too is a good
way
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improve
 your
health
. In like manner as eating healthy is another
way
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 better your
health
, exercising still remains
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 pre-eminent
way
 to build on your
health
. People tend to work on their diet for
health
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improvement
. They even cut down on activities just to keep
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helthy
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healthy
.
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 spent watching TV, working on their laptops and even hanging out with friends, so as to improve their
health
. The fact still remains that, the better
way
 to make effective progress in your
health
 is through
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exercise
. I completely agree that most better
way
 to improve your
health
 is through
exercise
. Dietitians
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moderation in the thing you eat or even how you line is a better
way
. Doctors will tell,
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 having enough rest like sleeping six to eight hours a very good
way
 of improving your
health
however
, as much as all there other
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avenues
 are great, you can never
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of regular
exercise
,
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, the boxer Mohammed Ali says that, the key to his success in boxing is tie bo consistency in
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. In conclusion, many ways of maintaining a good healthy life are great. Taking out time
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activities
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and
 drinking Water regularly as my
health
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 of improving your
health
. But the best and most outstanding
way
 to improve your
health
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 is by doing regular
exercise
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