Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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relations, and there is little that might be done to rectify
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. I partly agree with that idea. Because the media is developing day
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their bad ideas.
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, plenty of
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essay. On the one hand, many physical
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. Because technologies continue updating. It seems to me that, plenty of individuals cannot imagine their
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. But, they do not know that their opinions
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by someone. As far as I am concerned, it brings
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to somebody.
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stopped by someone.
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, sensible
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, and
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they only provide beneficial information from the media. I think
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nobody
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control their mind. Because they have their own opinion.
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during their
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. In conclusion, some
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believe to trick about the
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and some
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never believe to trick about it.
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there are too many types of
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yourself,
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is about creating yourself.
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