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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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 about sales of coffee called Fairtrade-labelled and
bananas
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specific years in five European nations.
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,
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sales
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 of coffee in all given countries
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increased
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during
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 period but the
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United Kingdom showed
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 raised.
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,
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sales
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 of
bananas
 in all countries showed went up except Sweden and Denmark but
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Switzerland showed dramatically increased. Looking at
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 table in more detail, the Uk showed
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sharply
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growth in
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sales
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 from 1.5 to 20
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euros
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, Sweden showed
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increased
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 from 0.8 to 1
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euros
. The third and fourth
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sales
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was
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 in Switzerland and Denmark from 3 to 6 and from 1.8 to 2
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euros
, respectively. Regarding
bananas
, Switzerland was the highest countries showed
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increased
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 in sales from 15 to 47
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euros
,
whereas
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a dcreased
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 from 2 to 0.9 2
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euros
. The second country showed went in
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euros
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, millions, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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