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Nowadays, internet connection is becoming a common phenomenon. What are causes and effects of this problem.

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In
this
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 modern era, the trend of using
internet
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 is followed by many individuals. Everyone has
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 motive and perspective behind it that depends on their personal choices and needs. I will
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 factors responsible for
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 its consequences on the developing society. The major cause is
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the dominancy
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dominancy
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dominance
 of the web over
majority
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the majority
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 of workplaces. To elaborate
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, today, technological gadgets can be seen in every organisation, which cannot be operated appropriately without
net
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a net
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.
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, people in offices have to perform their daily tasks using
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internet
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.
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, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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businesses have to deal with local or international clients and communicate with them for significant reasons
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 as sending emails, exchange of documentation, attend online meetings or conferences, which cannot be performed face to face all the
times
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. Henceforth,
masses
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the masses
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 are bound to do their work online to run their businesses or continue their job. The possible effects of
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the abovementioned
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 trend can be disastrous, where humans are becoming habitual of
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle. They expend
hefty
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 amount of time in front of the screen, which reduces their physical activity. To exemplify
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, after
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 pandemic,
world's
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the world's
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 largest amount of population is working online, where they
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 glued
with
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to
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 the screen for longer hours
that
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which
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 may cause
some
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health problems to them.
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,
less
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the less
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 physical movement could elevate the chances of leading
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 unhealthy life and probably can decrease their life expectancy too. In conclusion, it can be summarised that usage of
internet
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the internet
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 for useful purposes offers enormous benefits.
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, its
overusage
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over usage
overuse
 can have adverse effects on human life.
Therefore
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, it would be better if it is used in limit.

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