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The world’s natural resources such as oil, forests, and freshwater are being consumed at an ever-increasing rate. What are the dangers of the situation? what can be done to solve the problem?

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Nowadays, non-renewable sources
such
 as water are in scarcity
as a result
 of overconsumption.
This
 essay will discuss some dangers posed by the misuse of these resources
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 and
also
 offer some solutions to tackle
this
 issue. Obviously, humankind is plundering natural sources
such
 as sweet water
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 a pace that outstrips the earth's ability to recover. The fact is as we are part of the same life chain cycle,
this
then
 poses dangers in our life. Global warming has increased exponentially during the past few years and it has direct implications for oil and fossil fuels misuse. Drought, unpredictable rains, and
overall
 weather patterns are resulting from deforestation,
Consequently
,many species are seized to exist which is impose indirect changes on our lives as well. To diminish these aforementioned consequences and hopefully overcome
this
 problem, it is best to change our lifestyle as a part of society.
For example
 , using more biodegradable materials can help to reduce global warming.
On the other hand
, the government is playing
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 role in between as it can directly impose taxes on stockholders or encourage them when they use less
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non-renewable sources. To clarify, their annual use of sweet water or fossil fuels consumption can be tracked down
as a result
 they are either imposed extra taxes or exempt.
Overall
 how to use natural resources is very important as it can cause potential dangers in our life
also
 regulating laws to deter or encourage producers would be a great help to block some of its negative consequences.
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