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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1900s. Summarise the informaion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1900s. Summarise the informaion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart illustrates the fundamental causes of worldwide
land
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 degradation, and the given table shows how these reasons affected three places of the globe in the 1990s.
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, it can be clearly seen that the fundamental factors of worldwide
land
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 degradation were because of over-grazing and deforestation. Meanwhile, the
land
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 in Europe was the highest area affected by the causes. Looking at the information in more detail, 35% and 30% of the reasons why
land
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 degraded were over-grazing and deforestation respectively.
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 followed by over-cultivation at 28%. The
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 reason was because of the other causes. There was 23% of total
land
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 degraded in Europe, and the main cause was deforestation (9.8%). 11.3% of
land
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 in Oceania was degraded by over-grazing.
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, 3.3% of
land
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 degraded in North America was because of over-cultivation.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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