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The bar chart below shows the perportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011, and the pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.

The bar chart below shows the perportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011, and the pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.
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The two charts give information about the proportions of English
men
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 and
women
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 living without a partner, categorized by age brackets and the number of
bedrooms
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 owned by single households in 2011.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the percentages of single-occupant males and females of all groups were approximately equivalent, among which the trend was almost as follows, the older
women
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 were the more they lived by themselves; the younger
men
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 were the more they were single, and most of those families possessed less than 3
bedrooms
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. When it comes to the proportions of single households, the 50-64 age group was nearly 50% to 50%,
although
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 the figure for
women
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 slightly outstripped that of
men
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. Single
women
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 aged between 65-75, 75-84 and 85 and above accounted for 62%, 72% and 75%, respectively.
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, around 65% of
men
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 were single, exceeding their single counterparts aged between 25-34 and 16-24 years old, at 62% and 53% respectively. With regard to the portions of the quantities of
bedrooms
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 possessed by one-person families, one bedroom made up for the biggest share of 35.4%, which was followed by those who owned two
bedrooms
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 and three
bedrooms
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, at 29.8% and 28.0% respectively,
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 there were few single-person families having four
bedrooms
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 or five and more
bedrooms
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, with merely 5.3% and 1.4%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, bedrooms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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