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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts below illustrate
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percentagewise
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percentage-wise
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about
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of
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 European
adults
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adult's
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 activities in their free time in two
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years
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 1985 and 1995.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 watching TV was the most significant part of their leisure time in both years
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while
 talking with friends was substituted by playing computer games in 1995. In 1985 watching TV (32%) was the most popular activity among
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adult's society in Europe,
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second
place
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eating out which makes up 23% of the
chart
.
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, talking with friends was
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third place with
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percentsge
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percentage
 rate of 21%. Talking with family and other activities made up
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 part of the
chart
. In 1995 watching TV (30%) has remained people's favourite activity as it was in 1985. It is interesting to note that within a span of 10 years playing computer games became
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enjoyable
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 activity in Europe with 27%, it totally took
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 place of spending time with friends which in 1995 made up 26% of the
chart
.
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, talking with family, eating out and other activities were the smallest segment of the supplied
chart
.
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