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The pictures show the layout of a cinema in 1980 and the same cinema now.

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The two drawings demonstrate how a
cinema
 has transformed after some refurbishments in 1980 compared to now.
Overall
, the
cinema
's layout witnessed radical changes with the most noticeable being the addition of many cinemas and some other amenities. On the bottom
side
 of the map, there were the first
cinema
 on the left-hand
side
 and an area for tickets and drinks lying on the right-hand
side
, between was an entry we could access the
theater
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theatre
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 in 1980.
However
, at the moment, the
cinema
 is moved into a nearby toilet situated on the west
side
 and the old location consists of relax room and an area for food and drinks.
Similarly
, a DVD shop beside the ticket shop replaced the space for selling drinks. On the top
side
, the place used to be a car park but
then
 was knocked down. The second
cinema
 located on the east
side
 was relocated above the toilet and three new cinemas were erected.
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