The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
The graph illustrates changes in average
temperatures
per month and the table compares the hours
of sunshine average in a year in London
,New York
and Sydney
.
It is clear that
although
London
and New York
become warmer, but
the Remove the conjunction
apply
temperatures
start to decrease near the end of the year.The total hours
in New York
and Sydney
are nearly the same and significantly higher than that in London
.
Regarding the first graph,the changes in temperatures
in London
and New York
show a similarity average temperatures
in both London
and New York
, respectively peaking at 23 degrees
and 29 degrees
in July,while
January is the month when Sydney
experiences the warmest decrease to an average of around 5 degrees
in December and January,3 degrees
lower than the figure for London
,while
Sydney
shows the lowest average temperatures
in July,reaching just over 15 degrees
.
In terms of the shining hours
,New York
has the highest annual hours
of sunshine at around 2,535.Meanwhile,Sydney
recorded 2,473 as the number of shining hours
,which is roughly double the figure in London
.Submitted by anhnguhongmai on
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