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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping center or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Recently, it has become common that big-box stores have been more popular than small domestic
shops
 for most
customers
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give my opinion that it is a positive development. On the one hand, there are various merits for
customers
 to buy
things
 in large shopping centres.
Firstly
, large retailers can ensure the quality of the
products
, and even if there was a quality issue, the policy and process of the shopping mall allows the
customers
 to turn back the
products
 and refund conveniently.
Secondly
, big shopping centre always delivers good environments and utilities to offer
customers
 a good experience.
People
 have a comfortable place to have a rest or take some food when being tired after long-time shopping.
Thirdly
,
big-box
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 retailer is a good place to show the
products
 of international brands to the national citizens, which might help
people
 to cultivate an international taste.
In other words
,
large
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 shopping centre is a good platform to buy or enjoy good quality
things
 for
customers
.
On the other hand
, the case that shopping mall dominating the markets have some drawbacks as well. First of all, with the replacement of local and domestic
shops
, goods basically having some characters and features of the specific nation might become decreasing.
As a result
, the national culture will disappear gradually. On top of that, small businesses allow
customers
 to buy
things
with
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 a lower price compared with that in the shopping mall, because of the low running costs,
such
 as the payments to rent houses and employees' wages.
Consequently
, without numerous small
shops
, citizens have fewer choices to buy
products
 in some special style and with less money.
However
, the drawbacks can not outweigh the merits because material and cultural globalization can bring more experience and efficiency to
people
. In conclusion, it is a positive case that
people
 buy
things
 more in big shopping centres
instead
 of small
shops
 nowadays.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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