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Buying things in internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more popular. Do advantage of this outweigh disadvantage.

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Nowadays, buying over the Internet has become fashionable,
such
 as tickets, books, etc. There are advantages and disadvantages to it. I will tell you why their plus outweigh
firstly
 we talk about the advantages of the
website
.e-commerce sites service 24 hours seven days so a person prefers to buy on the
website
. in
this
 contemporary ,era people do not have free time and they do not want . Buying on a
website
 is easy , practical and fastly. ıt has been a saviour ,especially for the working public sometimes it is cheaper and delivery is fast.after covid-19 buying is increasing fastly on the
website
. it is easy for an older human
for instance
,ı has an old neighbour and she likes reading books and she has been reading three books a week but she has not been going to a bookshop so she has bought
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 online. one the other hand e-commerce sites sometimes could not be safe
for example
 we enter our credit card details on sites and we may encounter scammers. ın general , we can see that shopping on the Internet has more advantages
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