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One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new start-up business. Write a letter to him and say - What is your opinion on his new business idea - What have you decided on this matter - What are the reasons for your decision

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Dear John I am writing
this
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regards
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 to your proposal of becoming
partner
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a partner
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 in your start-up. I really like your
idea
 . I am of
opinion
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the opinion
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 that
this
 business
idea
 will
profitable
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be profitable
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 in
6to
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6 to
 8 months from now on. The
idea
 of selling
vegetable
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vegetables
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 online to local vicinity is really fascinating.
Therefore
 , I have decided to become
partner
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a partner
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 in your
start up
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start-up
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 by investing 50000 pounds .I am
also
 keen to understand
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the logistic
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logistic
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logistics
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 side of
business
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the business
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. As
it
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 very important to understand transportation
cost
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costs
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. how much percentage of that
consitute
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constitute
 them.
logistic
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logistics
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 should be on time for
this
 kind of business. I would like to tell you
reason
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a reason
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of
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 joining your start-up.
Firstly
 It is
an
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a
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 great
idea
 and
have
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has
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potential
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the potential
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 to become
multfold
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multiple
 in
short
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a short
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 span of time. If we take care of some basic expenditure like
operatiosn
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operations
operation
,
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and logistic
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logistic
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logistics
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then
 we can achieve profitability in 6 to 8 months .
secondly
oranic
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organic
 growing
vegetable
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vegetables
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have really good demand across
uk
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UK
. so the response will
tremendous
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be tremendous
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 from day one. I look forward to hearing from you . All the best Martin
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