History tells that people have often thought about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society?
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fail in making Fix the agreement mistake
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occur. In my opinion, it is possible to make ideal
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an ideal
scoiety
, there are several ways to create Correct your spelling
society
ideal
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an ideal
society
including, reduce
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reducing
gap
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the gap
bweteen
rich and poor Correct your spelling
between
people
, and improve
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improving
people
health.
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people's
To begin
with, I totally believe is possible to create ideal
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an ideal
the ideal
society
. To illustrate, government
can build more social clubs in order to Add an article
the government
boosts
relationships among members of Change the verb
boost
society
. Therefore
, these social clubs can contribute to bring
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bringing
people
together and reduce
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reducing
the
conflicts among Correct article usage
apply
people
. Furthermore
, the government can encourage people
to learn about their history via visit
museums and art Wrong verb form
visiting
gallary
, which Correct your spelling
gallery
this
can make Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
feel of
a sense of Change preposition
apply
beloning
to their heritage and cultures. Correct your spelling
belonging
As a result
, learn
about Wrong verb form
learning
histroy
boost a sense of identity Correct your spelling
history
among
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in
society
, which this
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apply
create
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creates
ideal
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an ideal
society
result of unite
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unites
people
.
Additionally
, I believe there are several factors contribute
to Correct pronoun usage
that contribute
creat
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create
perfect
community. The primary factor to Correct article usage
a perfect
creat
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create
ideal
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an ideal
society
is reduce
the gap between wealth and poor Fix the infinitive
to reduce
people
. For example
, affluent people
can donate money or clothes to poor people
, which this
can reduce the rate of poverty in Correct pronoun usage
apply
society
. Consequently
, less poverty mean
less crime, which Change the verb form
means
make
our Change the verb form
makes
society
away from violence. Enhance
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Enhancing
people
health is another element to create Change noun form
people's
perfect
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a perfect
the perfect
society
. To to
put Remove the redundancy
apply
in
other words, the government could promote Correct pronoun usage
it in
healthy
lifestyle namely , playing Correct article usage
a healthy
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a sport
the sport
sport
, and Fix the agreement mistake
sports
eat
healthy food, which Wrong verb form
eating
this
can reduce serious diseases Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as ,
cancer, heart attack, Remove the comma
apply
obesity
in Correct word choice
and obesity
society
. Thus
, less illnesess
in Correct your spelling
illnesses
illness
society
mean
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means
healthy
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a healthy
society
, which make
our Change the verb form
makes
society
ideal.
To sum up
, I completely believe it is possible to make ideal
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an ideal
scoiety
through Correct your spelling
society
promote
, , there are different methods to create Replace the word
promotion
ideal
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an ideal
society
including, reduce gap
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the gap
bweteen
affluent and poor Correct your spelling
between
people
, and boosts
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boosting
Change noun form
people's
people
health.Submitted by faiz3177 on
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