With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animals species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction.Do they think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problems.

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the rapid development of urbanisation, deforestation and illegal hunting, wild animal

species

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is

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becoming endangered and some

species

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are even close to

extinction

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. I believe it is important to protect

near

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extinction

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animals

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. Policies and legal

enforcement

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should be taken into

actions

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. Extinct animal

protection

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has always been part of environmental preservation. Extinct animal

protection

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is crucial

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the fact that

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animals

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also

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protects ecological balance.

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, some birds are

pest eating

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birds. When those birds

are vanished

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in nature, the

pests

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population will be dramatically raised and the crops would be destroyed. Without

food

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human

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will not

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to survive anyway.

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is a severe chain reaction, that we should prevent and avoid.

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,

animals

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should be protected for educational

purpose

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for

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future generations to know the

species

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around the world, and we could study and discover more from them.

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important step is to bring plans into action.

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urbanisation progresses

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into

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another level.

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protection

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the protection

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of extinct and endangered

species

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can be

meet

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at the same time.

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example

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government should introduce policies to enforce builders and developers to include natural landscapes

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as parks in their building project application, which is an effective way to rebuild habitats for endangered

species

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.

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, it is mutually beneficial for the communities and for

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the environment

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environment

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environmental

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protection

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for

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species

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.

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, illegal hunting penalties should be applied and charged as criminal

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as the act that

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offender to jail for at least 10 years. On the other hand, Law

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is more important than legal punishments, it is the frontline for animal

extinction

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protection

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. If

enforcement

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department

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are unable to effectively enforce the law, the law

protection

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would be meaningless. In conclusion, nowadays, many

animals

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are rarely seemed

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the fact that they

loses

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their habitat

for

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to

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city developments and expansions, the

destroy

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destruction

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of natural forest and hunting illegally in rural areas. It is urgent and significant to proceed

action

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in animal

extinction

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prevention with the

supports

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of strict government regulations, policies and strong

enforcement

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