The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
given graph illustrates the changes that had
happened in the costs of three dissimilar metals in 2014.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, the price
of Nickel exprienced
by far the most significant decrease among these three mentioned metals. Correct your spelling
experienced
While
the cost of Zinc relatively rose over this
period of time, the price
of Copper was almost identical.
According to
the figure that
related to Nickel, over the first half of the year, Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
figure exprienced
a downward trend Correct your spelling
experienced
about
9% .Afterwards, it increased to -1% and Change preposition
of about
remanied
steady until September Correct your spelling
remained
then
a new downward trend started but during the next month this
trend became reversed.
Moving into the changes that took place in Zinc and Copper costs, with exception
Add an article
the exception
some
fluctuations that they had over Change preposition
of some
this
1-year period, the ultimate change rate in the price
of Zinc slightly increased by 1% whereas
the final change rate for Copper's cost was about -0.5% and the price
of this
metal exprienced
an insignificant decrease during Correct your spelling
experienced
this
time frame.Submitted by m.v.g1371 on
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