The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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happened in the costs of three dissimilar metals in 2014.
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, the
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of Nickel
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experienced
by far the most significant decrease among these three mentioned metals.
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the cost of Zinc relatively rose over
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period of time, the
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of Copper was almost identical.
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related to Nickel, over the first half of the year,
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experienced
a downward trend
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9% .Afterwards, it increased to -1% and
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remained
steady until September
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a new downward trend started but during the next month
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trend became reversed. Moving into the changes that took place in Zinc and Copper costs, with
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fluctuations that they had over
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1-year period, the ultimate change rate in the
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of Zinc slightly increased by 1%
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the final change rate for Copper's cost was about -0.5% and the
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metal
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experienced
an insignificant decrease during
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time frame.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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